Writers' Group 2: SCRIPTS

Tamir · Joined: 22 Mar 2008 Posts: 1628 Location: Israel

It's turning out to be quite difficult for me. But that's what makes it interesting! Very Happy

Tinu. · Posted: Mon Jul 07, 2008 1:23 pm Post subject:

I've the first bit of it, and shall be finishing it shortly. =D
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Asa · Posted: Mon Jul 07, 2008 8:00 pm Post subject:

I can't decide whether to make this a tragedy or a comedy. Any preferences? After that, it should go easily.
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Tinu. · Posted: Tue Jul 08, 2008 3:30 pm Post subject:

I've discovered I really don't know how to write a script. Oh well, i'll do some research and then see what comes of it.
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Maeniel · Joined: 22 Mar 2008 Posts: 1052 Location: Next to Waldo

Just a reminder that there's only one week left to submit entries! Smile

And Asa, I'll flip the coin for you. Heads was comedy--so comedy we shall have! Smile

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Asa · Posted: Sun Jul 13, 2008 12:02 pm Post subject:

yay! I'll write it this afternoon... pressure always worked well.
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Nem: "It's the sort of face you just know is getting ready to poke you with something sharp."
BS: "...then insist you eat a brownie."
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Allicat · Posted: Mon Jul 14, 2008 7:38 am Post subject:

*whimpers* I have nothing! I cannot write des sriptes! Ooh! Idea!
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Allicat · Posted: Mon Jul 14, 2008 8:53 am Post subject:

Mwa ha haaaaa! Brain food! I can give a full translation if needed, and I think I may continue with this plot, it intrigues me...

Lost luggage.

Busy London street scene. Florence is hurrying back and forth centre stage, trying to gain attention whilst consulting a guide book. She carries a navy suitcase. Stall owners shout their wares and there is a blaring of traffic in the background. General confusion.

Florence: [increasingly frantic] Vous parler francais? Monseiur? Madame? Vous parler francais? S’il vous plait?

There is a shout OSR

Magda: Hey! My case! Get back here with that!

Young man charges out from SR holding identical navy case and collides with Florence. They both fall and the cases go flying. Young man gets to his feet and flees, leaving Florence scrambling for her case. Magda enters SR and sees Florence on the floor.

Magda: Are you alright Madam?
Florence: Vous parler francais?
Magda: Oui mademoiselle. Comment ca va?
Florence: Oh! Merci dieu! Oui, ca va. Mais je ne suis pas parler l’Anglais et je n’ai pas de change. Ou est l’ambassade de France?
Magda: Attente. Taxi! Ici, mam’zelle. Il vous prendre la. [to taxi driver off-stage L] Take her to the french embassy please, this should cover it. [Gives him cash]
Florence: Merci, merci beaucoups! Comment est-ce que je peux vous rembourser?
Magda: C’est un plaisir. Bonne chance!

Florence exits SL. Magda gets out mobile phone and dials whilst picking up the remaining suitcase.

Magda: [into phone] Minor hitch, some kid tried to grab the case. He couldn’t have known what was in it, but do a check all the same. There will be prints on it still. [Pause] Yeah, I got it back. He crashed into some poor french girl and dropped it. She didn’t know a word of English so I sent her to their embassy. She’ll be ok. [Pause] Yes, I’m sure! The paperwork is all safe and shipping can proceed. This latest batch of animal crackers is ours. They won’t know what hit them. See you back at HQ.

Magda hangs up, puts the case on a bench and opens it. It is full of clothes. She begins to frantically search through them, scattering them over the stage.

Magda: Taxi! The french embassy please.

Exit SL.
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Asa · Posted: Mon Jul 14, 2008 8:58 am Post subject:

Hee hee. Saw that coming. This is a pretty basic storyline, so if you do decide to continue it, throw in a major plot twist (Like, Florence is a French spy, just like Magda's a British one, or that Magda gets hit in the head, gets amnesia, and wakes up speaking only Hungarian. That kind of thing.) to make it more interesting. ^_^ Enjoyable!

Okay, so now I REALLY have to write mine...
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BS: "...then insist you eat a brownie."
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Asa · Posted: Mon Jul 14, 2008 6:04 pm Post subject:

Well, I've got the first four lines done, and it's already lame. -_-

EDIT: Finished it, and it's still lame, and definitely not going to win - I doubt anyone's going to vote for it. I wouldn't vote for it, but I can't think of anything better, so I'm throwing in the towel and just posting it as is. -_-

EDIT 2: Added the animal crackers... eh-heh.

Comedic Play in Two Half Acts or Two Pages, Whichever Comes First

ACT THE FIRST HALF

*Lights go up on an empty stage. Woman comes in Stage Right bodily dragging a teenage girl*

Anna: Mom, I don’t want to go!

Mom: Ann, you don’t have a choice, and now’s not the time. Stop arguing with me, and get in there!

Anna: No! *digs in her heels and stops*

Mom: *sighs* Ann… If only your father could see you now…

Anna: Dad’s gone, Mom! Get over it!

Mom: Anna Marie, he’s just around the corner! Don’t overdramatize it!

Anna: Hmph.

*They glare at each other Center Stage. Doctor Himmelgrab sticks his head in through the back curtain, UB*

Doctor Himmelgrab: Mrs. Murphy?

Mom: Goodness me! Doctor Himmelgrab, what are you doing here?

Doctor Himmelgrab: …This is my office. I should be saying, what are you doing here?

Mom: *long-suffering sigh* Oh Doctor, it’s my little Anna! She’s being so stubborn recently, and so… so out of sorts, and I’m just at a loss! There must be something wrong! Please, I set this appointment up ages ago, you’ve got to look at her!

*Anna glowers at her oblivious mother, and the Doctor moves over to his desk*

Doctor Himmelgrab: Well, Mrs. Murphy, I’ll check my calendar… Mrs. Murphy, there’s no appointment for today.

Anna: YES!

*Mom glares at the doctor, who quails*

Doctor Himmelgrab: Eh-heh… I’ll just refer you to another doctor, shall I? *Continues as he quickly scribbles something down* I’m sending you to Doctor Auchterlonie, and he’ll take care of your problem.

*Doctor shoves them to Stage Left, then runs back to UB, and runs out. Mom and Anna are left blinking as the lights go out.*

ACT THE SECOND HALF

*Lights come on, Mom bodily dragging Anna from Stage Right, Anna fisting a bag of animal crackers*

Anna: Mom, I don’t want to go!

Mom: Ann, you don’t have a choice and now’s not the time. Now stop arguing with me, and get in there!

Anna: No! *digs in her heels and stops*

Mom: Look – Ann, didn’t we do this already?

Anna: *grumbles* Yeah, last week.

Mom: So why are we doing this again? Come on Ann, please, just this once?

*Doctor Auchterlonie sticks his head through the back curtain, UB, at the noise*

Anna: *throws the animal crackers to the ground in anger, where they scatter* You said that last time! And the time before that, and the time –

Doctor Auchterlonie: Excuse me – may I help you?

*Anna and Mom are startled out of their argument*

Mom: Oh – Doctor Auchterlonie? I’ve got this problem, you see, my daughter here will never listen to me –

Anna: *staring at the handsome redheaded doctor* Mother, I don’t know what you’re talking about! Don’t I always listen when you tell me something? Hello, Doctor, I’m Anna Marie Murphy. When did you graduate? Can’t have been all that long ago, and at the top of your class – you look so young, yet you're obviously so talented. Tee-hee!

*Doctor Auchterlonie looks at her bemusedly, as she’s ten years his junior, and Mom looks on, gaping, as the two of them enter his office and shut the door.*

*Lights out*

*cringes* Blast away, I completely deserve it...
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Nem: "It's the sort of face you just know is getting ready to poke you with something sharp."
BS: "...then insist you eat a brownie."
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Think but this and all is mended...
Give me your hands if we be friends,
And Robin shall restore amends.

Tamir · Joined: 22 Mar 2008 Posts: 1628 Location: Israel

Well, uh.....

Where are the animal crackers? ^_^;;

Asa · Posted: Wed Jul 16, 2008 8:48 am Post subject:

Ann threw them away in a fit of teen angst. Did I or did I not tell you it was lame?
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Nem: "It's the sort of face you just know is getting ready to poke you with something sharp."
BS: "...then insist you eat a brownie."
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If we shadows have offended,
Think but this and all is mended...
Give me your hands if we be friends,
And Robin shall restore amends.

Maeniel · Joined: 22 Mar 2008 Posts: 1052 Location: Next to Waldo

Haha, the animal crackers were more of a prompt to get the juices flowing rather than an actual requirement.

Five days left!
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Asa · Posted: Wed Jul 16, 2008 9:14 am Post subject:

...I completely forgot about that. Crap. Mane, should I work it in? As lame as it is, it can't get any worse.
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Keeper of the Library and the Gateway to Haven

Nem: "It's the sort of face you just know is getting ready to poke you with something sharp."
BS: "...then insist you eat a brownie."
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If we shadows have offended,
Think but this and all is mended...
Give me your hands if we be friends,
And Robin shall restore amends.

Maeniel · Joined: 22 Mar 2008 Posts: 1052 Location: Next to Waldo

If you can, that'd be great.
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