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Tamir



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PostPosted: Mon Jul 07, 2008 1:21 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

It's turning out to be quite difficult for me. But that's what makes it interesting! Very Happy
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PostPosted: Mon Jul 07, 2008 1:23 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I've the first bit of it, and shall be finishing it shortly. =D
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PostPosted: Mon Jul 07, 2008 8:00 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I can't decide whether to make this a tragedy or a comedy. Any preferences? After that, it should go easily.
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PostPosted: Tue Jul 08, 2008 3:30 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I've discovered I really don't know how to write a script. Oh well, i'll do some research and then see what comes of it.
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PostPosted: Sun Jul 13, 2008 11:41 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Just a reminder that there's only one week left to submit entries! Smile

And Asa, I'll flip the coin for you. Heads was comedy--so comedy we shall have! Smile
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PostPosted: Sun Jul 13, 2008 12:02 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

yay! I'll write it this afternoon... pressure always worked well.
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PostPosted: Mon Jul 14, 2008 7:38 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

*whimpers* I have nothing! I cannot write des sriptes! Ooh! Idea!
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PostPosted: Mon Jul 14, 2008 8:53 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Mwa ha haaaaa! Brain food! I can give a full translation if needed, and I think I may continue with this plot, it intrigues me...


Lost luggage.

Busy London street scene. Florence is hurrying back and forth centre stage, trying to gain attention whilst consulting a guide book. She carries a navy suitcase. Stall owners shout their wares and there is a blaring of traffic in the background. General confusion.

Florence: [increasingly frantic] Vous parler francais? Monseiur? Madame? Vous parler francais? Síil vous plait?

There is a shout OSR

Magda: Hey! My case! Get back here with that!

Young man charges out from SR holding identical navy case and collides with Florence. They both fall and the cases go flying. Young man gets to his feet and flees, leaving Florence scrambling for her case. Magda enters SR and sees Florence on the floor.

Magda: Are you alright Madam?
Florence: Vous parler francais?
Magda: Oui mademoiselle. Comment ca va?
Florence: Oh! Merci dieu! Oui, ca va. Mais je ne suis pas parler líAnglais et je níai pas de change. Ou est líambassade de France?
Magda: Attente. Taxi! Ici, mamízelle. Il vous prendre la. [to taxi driver off-stage L] Take her to the french embassy please, this should cover it. [Gives him cash]
Florence: Merci, merci beaucoups! Comment est-ce que je peux vous rembourser?
Magda: Cíest un plaisir. Bonne chance!

Florence exits SL. Magda gets out mobile phone and dials whilst picking up the remaining suitcase.

Magda: [into phone] Minor hitch, some kid tried to grab the case. He couldnít have known what was in it, but do a check all the same. There will be prints on it still. [Pause] Yeah, I got it back. He crashed into some poor french girl and dropped it. She didnít know a word of English so I sent her to their embassy. Sheíll be ok. [Pause] Yes, Iím sure! The paperwork is all safe and shipping can proceed. This latest batch of animal crackers is ours. They wonít know what hit them. See you back at HQ.

Magda hangs up, puts the case on a bench and opens it. It is full of clothes. She begins to frantically search through them, scattering them over the stage.

Magda: Taxi! The french embassy please.

Exit SL.
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PostPosted: Mon Jul 14, 2008 8:58 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hee hee. Saw that coming. This is a pretty basic storyline, so if you do decide to continue it, throw in a major plot twist (Like, Florence is a French spy, just like Magda's a British one, or that Magda gets hit in the head, gets amnesia, and wakes up speaking only Hungarian. That kind of thing.) to make it more interesting. ^_^ Enjoyable!

Okay, so now I REALLY have to write mine...
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PostPosted: Mon Jul 14, 2008 6:04 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Well, I've got the first four lines done, and it's already lame. -_-

EDIT: Finished it, and it's still lame, and definitely not going to win - I doubt anyone's going to vote for it. I wouldn't vote for it, but I can't think of anything better, so I'm throwing in the towel and just posting it as is. -_-

EDIT 2: Added the animal crackers... eh-heh.


Comedic Play in Two Half Acts or Two Pages, Whichever Comes First


ACT THE FIRST HALF

*Lights go up on an empty stage. Woman comes in Stage Right bodily dragging a teenage girl*


Anna: Mom, I donít want to go!

Mom: Ann, you donít have a choice, and nowís not the time. Stop arguing with me, and get in there!

Anna: No! *digs in her heels and stops*

Mom: *sighs* AnnÖ If only your father could see you nowÖ

Anna: Dadís gone, Mom! Get over it!

Mom: Anna Marie, heís just around the corner! Donít overdramatize it!

Anna: Hmph.

*They glare at each other Center Stage. Doctor Himmelgrab sticks his head in through the back curtain, UB*


Doctor Himmelgrab: Mrs. Murphy?

Mom: Goodness me! Doctor Himmelgrab, what are you doing here?

Doctor Himmelgrab: ÖThis is my office. I should be saying, what are you doing here?

Mom: *long-suffering sigh* Oh Doctor, itís my little Anna! Sheís being so stubborn recently, and soÖ so out of sorts, and Iím just at a loss! There must be something wrong! Please, I set this appointment up ages ago, youíve got to look at her!

*Anna glowers at her oblivious mother, and the Doctor moves over to his desk*

Doctor Himmelgrab: Well, Mrs. Murphy, Iíll check my calendarÖ Mrs. Murphy, thereís no appointment for today.

Anna: YES!

*Mom glares at the doctor, who quails*

Doctor Himmelgrab: Eh-hehÖ Iíll just refer you to another doctor, shall I? *Continues as he quickly scribbles something down* Iím sending you to Doctor Auchterlonie, and heíll take care of your problem.

*Doctor shoves them to Stage Left, then runs back to UB, and runs out. Mom and Anna are left blinking as the lights go out.*


ACT THE SECOND HALF

*Lights come on, Mom bodily dragging Anna from Stage Right, Anna fisting a bag of animal crackers*

Anna: Mom, I donít want to go!

Mom: Ann, you donít have a choice and nowís not the time. Now stop arguing with me, and get in there!

Anna: No! *digs in her heels and stops*

Mom: Look Ė Ann, didnít we do this already?

Anna: *grumbles* Yeah, last week.

Mom: So why are we doing this again? Come on Ann, please, just this once?

*Doctor Auchterlonie sticks his head through the back curtain, UB, at the noise*

Anna: *throws the animal crackers to the ground in anger, where they scatter* You said that last time! And the time before that, and the time Ė

Doctor Auchterlonie: Excuse me Ė may I help you?

*Anna and Mom are startled out of their argument*


Mom: Oh Ė Doctor Auchterlonie? Iíve got this problem, you see, my daughter here will never listen to me Ė

Anna: *staring at the handsome redheaded doctor* Mother, I donít know what youíre talking about! Donít I always listen when you tell me something? Hello, Doctor, Iím Anna Marie Murphy. When did you graduate? Canít have been all that long ago, and at the top of your class Ė you look so young, yet you're obviously so talented. Tee-hee!

*Doctor Auchterlonie looks at her bemusedly, as sheís ten years his junior, and Mom looks on, gaping, as the two of them enter his office and shut the door.*

*Lights out*



*cringes* Blast away, I completely deserve it...
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BS: "...then insist you eat a brownie."
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Tamir



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PostPosted: Wed Jul 16, 2008 3:24 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Well, uh.....

Where are the animal crackers? ^_^;;
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PostPosted: Wed Jul 16, 2008 8:48 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Ann threw them away in a fit of teen angst. Did I or did I not tell you it was lame?
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PostPosted: Wed Jul 16, 2008 9:03 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Haha, the animal crackers were more of a prompt to get the juices flowing rather than an actual requirement.

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PostPosted: Wed Jul 16, 2008 9:14 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

...I completely forgot about that. Crap. Mane, should I work it in? As lame as it is, it can't get any worse.
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PostPosted: Wed Jul 16, 2008 9:47 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

If you can, that'd be great.
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