[theBSDude]

Here it is, I'm thinking about adding a bit more to the part about legends, though.



Do you know why vampires don’t come out in the daytime? No, they don’t burst into flames or any-$#*! like that. And they don’t {@#< sparkle, that’s stupid.

They stay hidden until nightfall for the same reasons as werewolves, goblins, and trolls. Because of us.

The sun isn’t their weakness: it’s our advantage. Nobody sees better than a human in daylight, especially an advantage when no other race is as good with guns as we are.

It’s been that way pretty much forever. Started with way back with rocks, ya know. Even in the days of hunter-gatherers, we had a distinct advantage over every other intelligent life form. And it’s just grown.

True, we don’t have a great record in one-on-one, hand-to-claw, and, despite decent hearing, our lack of any real sense of smell makes us pretty pathetic in the dark. So, if we only have an advantage for 50% of the day (yearly average), why are we the dominant race? Because, during the daytime, human superiority is undisputed, but during the night, four different races compete, and that’s not even counting night-owl humans (like me) that became major players with the advent of electric lights.

Enough about this $#*! though, what do they look like? for those who don’t know. We live in a grand age of tolerance now, but centuries (millennia?) of adaptation (and latent racism) mean that most of the Others aren’t comfortable (or even awake) in the day, so a fair number of you reading this are unfamiliar with at least one of the Other races.

Vamps: Elves. That’s really all there is to say: Elves with pointy teeth.

Wolves: furry ears, big canine teeth, tend to have slightly bigger hands and slightly longer feet than us.

Gobbies: smaller teeth than us, actually, and long fingers. And of course, the Yoda ears, but, without the hair. That’d be... really gross on the chicks.

Trolls: these guys blend pretty well with humans, just bigger molars, lower fine-motor skill, and tend to be tall and stocky. Good linebackers, and actually very good accountants.

Most of the legends are from ancient times, like vampire immortality. They live about ninety years, average, only a decade or so more than the rest of us, but they’ve got crazy resistance to disease and visible aging, so back when people married at 11 and died at 35, 90 years was like, five generations, at least. Stake-thru-the-heart: not a stake- a spear, the beginning of clear human dominance. Crosses: superstition fed by con-artists, like those “get-out-of-purgatory” thingies. Garlic: I mentioned earlier humans can’t smell; we’re the only ones except trolls who can go near onions without getting a migraine. Silver bullets: this one never made sense to me; my only guess would be it’s related to the ancient wolf superstition that sleeping with a silver chain around your neck would make your teeth rot.

All the races inter-breed easily enough. My... ‘girlfriend’ is a lynx, half-vamp/half-wolf. I say ‘girlfriend’ because, as a mixed couple, we can’t legally marry, ‘though the Canadian license in our fire-safe and my middle finger say otherwise.

Eah... that was kinda rantish. I’m not political, I swear. This seems like as good a spot as any to end the prologue, so... yeah.
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[Asa]

...?

That was my reaction to it. What's going on, why is your narrator so foul-mouthed, and what's the premise for this world? A prologue is supposed to answer a few of these things, not raise them.

It seems sort of along the same lines as mine, in that it doesn't actually introduce a character in interaction with another, it's just sort of an overview. What were you planning on doing with it?
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[theBSDude]

[electricpanda]

Agreed: It was a good character portrait, but maybe less fitted to the brief.

Also, can I get an extension? My computer ate my half-written piece ad it won't be back from the repair shop for a couple of days. It's recoverable, though.
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[theBSDude]

I could try to come up with something that fits better.
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"I'm like a ninja with no hopes or dreams." --Wally of Dilbert

[Maeniel]

I'll give you guys till the 14th.
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[electricpanda]

Thanks, much appreciated!
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[Tamir]

I long since gave up on this, and it grew quiet as well. I'm sorry.